"Shh we're in the library," Juan answered.
"Both of you be quiet," Marianna yelled
Shawn yelled "I can talk whenever i want!"
Ms. Green yelled,"the whole class shut up."
"Let's go play outside," Gabby yelled.
"I have a basketball," said Shawn.
"I forgot to drink coffee this morning," cryed Ms.weiss.
Good job Juan! This dialogue is precise and well written. I'd like to see you work on connecting your dialogue to each other and starting to add action to your dialogue to make it more advanced. For example, you could say, "I forgot to drink coffee this morning," cried Ms. Weiss as she grabbed at her hair furiously.
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